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| Amaryllis Faye 2008-07-30 ch 14,  | abusei like this. the dialogue was not too deep for high-schoolers so it was believable - but not so light as to make the characters idiots. awesome work! |
| Vivi 2008-07-28 ch 14, anon. | abuseWow... you definitely need a LOT more reviews. *_* That was an awesome story, and I LOVED it. Keep up the awesome writing! :) |
| stunninglyaverage 2008-06-18 ch 14, anon. | abuseI LOVED it!Why doesn't this have more reviews? |
| a beginner 2008-06-04 ch 14, | abuseeveryone is gonna miss them, atleast those who have been reading them... :) |
| Ennui in Heidelberg 2008-05-31 ch 14, | abuseM a songwriter? Oh THAT got me! That was a beautiful ending! And OF COURSE it had to be in a bookshop! That's where all the cool kids go! Aw, thanks for such a lovely, enjoyable read! Now I feel all warm and fluffy! |
| Ennui in Heidelberg 2008-05-31 ch 10, | abuseThis is so typical of Logan and Gwen! It's just one big misunderstanding isn't it? |
| Ennui in Heidelberg 2008-05-31 ch 7, | abuseGreat development of Logan and Gwen's relationship! Lots of subtle detail is good, they characterise the relationship in a way that makes it unique! |
| Ennui in Heidelberg 2008-05-31 ch 5, | abuseUncle Freddie is adorable! Props for dialogue in this chapter! |
| Ennui in Heidelberg 2008-05-31 ch 4, | abuseNicely done! I liked the exchange between Gwen and Logan at the end, v v revealing! Btw, have you ever thought of getting a Beta reader (is that what they're called? I'm kinda new to the site)? There are just some small grammatical mistakes and some words used in the wrong context e.g. torrid (= heated, passionate, more commonly used in conjunction with describing a love affair or relationship, sounds a bit strange in the context in which you've used it). |
| Ennui in Heidelberg 2008-05-31 ch 1, | abuseHello! Don't know if you still care to get reviews, but just thought I'd put in my two cents anyway! I like your beginning. It grabs the attention! Your writing has improved a great deal from your last story (Nicole's Stupid Diary, I believe?), if I may say so. Power to you! |
| Evelyn 2008-04-20 ch 14, anon. | abuseNice story there =) i like the way you've taken a typical potential cliche-to-be and turned it into something so much more. There are so many stories out there with similar plot-lines, but you've really made your story stand out! Still, i think you should've given Logan a bit more depth by elaborating more about him. Also, what of Luigi and Cheryl? Nevertheless, fantastic effort =) Keep writing! |
| PrincessNancy 2008-03-23 ch 14, | abuseI think Logan WAS her perfect PRince Charming! That was really cute.. :) XoXo NAN! PS - I am at a loss for words! |
| Bebe 2008-03-08 ch 13, anon. | abuseWow! Yes, I would read a story set in a private school in the Philippines. It'll be interesting to see how they are, what they're like, what things you're going to include, and how you're going to write it. So I hope that you do. |
| Jayjack 2008-03-05 ch 14, | abuseAWE! that was one of the cutest things i've read. :) |
| kingrankar76 2008-02-13 ch 14, | abuseSweet. I love Logan. He is my kinda guy. This story is really cool. lOve the ending. |