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| Levana 2007-05-27 ch 1,  | abuseI'm so sorry I didn't review this earlier. This is nice. You should continue |
| DarkBlysse 2007-05-07 ch 1, | abuseWoot! You're writing more things! God, I love your style of writing. It just makes everything sound as if you're being spoken to directly, and you're not even reading the damn thing. Like your other reviewrs have said, this could turn out to be awesome (as I'm fairly sure it will), or it could be a total cliche. But I don't think you'd let that happen to it. And you'd better not...or else. But yeah, I think it's got a lot of potential, Muse. Can't wait for the update! |
| Celtsea 2007-05-07 ch 1, | abuseMm...This could turn out a total cliche...but then again, it could be the best thing since silced bread. Alexandra strikes me a bit of a Sue, but I am not really supposed to assume that she is one just from a single paragraph. She might have no people skills of something. I would run her character through the mary sue litmus test at: I will continue to read this, reluctantly so for the time being. |
| Tasha West 2007-05-07 ch 1, | abuseOoh this is interesting, but oh so short, I hope you update soonish. Your style of writing reminds me of the 'Undead...' series by MaryJanice Dickinson. But anyway, good start :) |
| SombreroWearinSharkbite 2007-05-06 ch 1, | abuseI'm really enjoying it! Keep on writing! Life to Alexandra! |
| Music by Moonlight 2007-05-06 ch 1, | abuseUm...are you sure you arne't attempting a parody? Because this might turn Mary-Sueish...though the main character is quite fun even if she's a total babe. |
| Not Dead Fred 2007-05-06 ch 1, | abuseYay me! I'll update this later today or tomorrow. So if you will be so kind as to review, I would be gratful! ~Muse~ |