I think many people-- a lot of writers I've noticed tend to feel the same way. I, myself, suffer from insomnia, literally.

Yet, when it comes to the poem, I really like the words. They are strong and resonating.

~M.Stains

great job!
I come across the same problem sometimes.
but, usually right before I start drifting off to go to sleep, and then I dream about it.lol. I guess it's a way of seeing it firsthand. anywhoozzerrss good job!
-Ash (:
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Powerful. Succinct. Relatable. :DD

"Sleep does not come easy/For that is when I have to write"

Loved those lines, though "for" sounds like it should be changed to something like "so." I dunno, but I think it makes more sense that way.

"Demons in the dark/Still plague this restless soul" I thought those were the perfect opening lines.

Talent, my friend. :D Keep writing!

;)becky

nice. short, to the point. insomnia is not fun.

Hi,
I think you mean to say, "I can't sleep at night..." in your summary. Otherwise, I think it's perfect.
Keep up the good work.
-Sarah

Okay.. here are some comments via stream of consiousness.


Excellent flow. It is short and to the point. It is very graphic and leaves little to the imagination so that readers understand your point of view. It has strong powerful action words like harsh, force, soothes, plagues...

This is almost too good to post here. You should consider submitting it professionally somewhere.