As promised, I read all your stories and now have a few more comments.

1) in the first story when James got Bullet...the dog's neck had been cut so he couldn't bark but in your first chapter of this story, you have the dog bark...

2) How could James know the layout of every room if the kid was in one of them but you don't say that until after you say he knows the layout of every room?

3) the grammar is still not quite correct and that tends to make the story harder to read

I can see that you have improved on your writing since your first story and I am enjoying the mini-mysteries.

good luck on future writings

Poor Bullet (sniff) I hope he'll be all right...

And I know how James feels. I get colds. A lot. It sucks.

It's about time I got to reviewing this! Sorry it took so long. I have some bad feelings about certain people on this ship, and exactly who is this Shin'ichi kid? Strange name.

Update soon!

Sorry for taking so long to review. I haven't been active on this site for a while.

Anyway, a lot of humor in this chapter, and a bit of forshadowing, both of which I like. :]

On a further note: Bullet's coming! Yay!