wow, i take it you are in a long distance relationship. painful, hard. and your poem conveys the emotions very well. it shows the struggle you are going through, the doubts and worries. nicely done.

people usually have trouble expressing frustration eloquently in a poem, but not you. :)

hey this one has some pontential. here is some help. Try to make this sound more...elaborated. Such as in the the third line then you suddenly change the way you present the song, that dosn't really work. And don't say why, what, where to many times.

Ouch. That hurt to read...a lot. This is what I have been feeling for a long time. Long-distance relationships, or just relationships that are impossible hurt. This had a lot of wonderful (and terrible) emotion. I loved it, and can relate. Wonderful job.