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| Taltush/MeiMei 2007-05-08 ch 1,  | abuseWow. That's really vivid. It's like a story at times, but it's still a poem, and it's still pretty and full of great imagery. Some moments gave me the impression that you were trying too hard to use nice words , like "our flaccid river" or "our vast cerulean horizon". Beautiful, vivid descriptions, but almost too beautiful, if you understand what I mean... Anyways, over all, very good job. |