cant wait 4 a sewuel!dazzle me with ur talent. BIG FAN
-kemi

OMG !! I loved your story . It's great i really enjoyed it, i think you should try publishing :)

please keep updating

This possibly be a stupid question but is this the
end?It really sounds like it and if so is there going
to be a second?Anyways it was awsome.

wait does that mean that they don't want
her to come and get coffee with them?Still
awsome.

you should update. Enough said.

I like the story. It's cute. Are you going to be adding on to it?

Oh gosh, I had to sit through and read this whole thing before I reviewed, but now it's so late all the lovely thoughts I had lined up have fluffed off. So, put it simply, you have a good thing going here. Though it breeses past many events that I wished you'd slow down and detail more, the concept, the characters and the storyline so far are all amazing. Excuse the raving, but I really love the way your group of characters meet, and move through life each with their own goals in mind. The story comes so naturally as if you wrote it all in one sitting. It's a very soft and lovely story to read. Needless to say, congratulations on completing nano.

I remember seeing a couple of typos in the story, but not enough of them to remember or intrude. If you want to do anything more with it, I think you need to read it over again, fix those up, and flesh out the story (especially the beginning. The introduction may need to go for a bit longer. Also, Lindy's character just wasn't immidiately attractive to me, I thought it was a bit weak).

More kudos to you for the characterization - it's some of the best and most constant that I've encountered on FP. Highlights for me especially was the side story and character of Miguel - he really stood out. Also, the cute mentions to anime were worth a laugh or two.

I hope to read more from you, and also hope that the rest of your work is up to the same quality as the story.

Oh yeah, about the only thing that bugs me is the name. 'Star search' just gives the story the wrong impression. I think you can find a name that does it more credit!

All the best,
Scarlet

Alright, let me start off with one itty-bitty thing. In chapter 9 you mention Angela plays the violin and the fiddle.

A violin is the same thing as a fiddle. The only difference is is that people who play classical music tend to call the instrument a violin and people who play folk music tend to call it a fiddle. And if you do know that, then I suggest you re-word the sentence so instead of it saying: "We both looked at her like she was crazy. Angela had been studying the violin since middle school. She played the fiddle occasionally for her Scottish Highlands group."

Have it instead say: "We both looked at her like she was crazy. Angela had been studying the violin since middle school. She even played the violin occasionally for her Scottish Highlands group."

That way it doesn't sound like you're talking about two different instruments.

Another thing that's quite a bit bigger. Once again, the flaw is in chapter 9. When you introduce Joe. Or rather, re-introduce Joe. In previous chapters Joe and Lindy have had multiple conversations and Joe has even called Lindy by name. What's with him not knowing who she is in chapter 9? Unless there's two Joes who both just happen to be Micheal's best friend. If that's the case then rename one of the Joes.

Otherwise... Yeah, things are going too smoothly for Lindy. It's gotten to the point where the story is starting to bore me, I'm having a seriously hard time getting through chapter 11 without falling asleep. Hearing about one person's constant success isn't something people want to hear about, trust me. Also, the point of view is adding to the lack of excitement. If you're going to write in first person, make the main character have a personality. Not some reluctant, lackluster, pushover personality!

i do like this story theres just one point I have to make. Ballet and Soccer are total opposites you can't do both. Its to do with how they work your muscles. Soccer shortens your leg muscles while Ballet lengthens the muscles. So doing ballet woudln't make you better and soccer would be detrimental to ballet. Just a point :)

I like your story alot!

I guess you've made it very different from all the normal chicklit sort of stories on Fictionpress!
Do update!

I liked this, but it's very predictable. Also (as a ballerina myself) I find it hard to believe she would be dancing on her pointes so soon, as it takes years to get strong enough to do that. I think things are going a bit too smoothly for her too. You need to throw more obstacles in, like big the schoolwork thing up a bit, and I feel Yolanda's constant bullying/stealing stuff thing has gone on a bit too long without Lindy doing anything to stop her. Perhaps you could have it coming to a head soon?

However this is really well-written and you definitely have a strong plot going.

yellowlemon x

I love this so far! It seems rather predictable, but then all of a sudden something changes. It's clever, and I really love how fast you update! -hugs- Thank you!

I am seriously obsessed with this story...Great job, good grammar, and update quickly!

Not very helpful, I know...

Well, it's pretty good. Especially if you just wrote it for NaNoWriMo competition. The reason I say that is because the plot in general is well... Predictable. I'm not being rude but thus far it's been pretty obvious that Lindy is an awesome dancer without trying (*cough* Mary-Sue *cough*) and that she's going to eventually get together with that Micheal character (*cough* It's very obvious and quite cliche *cough*).

But otherwise, I like this story. Keep updating ^^.