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| lomz 2008-02-23 ch 1,  | abuseinteresting. disturbing. i am liking it |
| Akhenaten 2008-01-05 ch 1, | abuseI really liked this poem. At first I just looked at it because Jeremiah is the best name ever-but I was surprised by how good it was. Your first four lines really drew me in- I especially liked the way the first line was a complete sentance- it was terse and very straightforward, which is a cool contrast to the rest of the poem which is a bit wordier. Then the first two lines of the next paragraph were really powerful. The on;y part of the poem I didn't dig was the way you divided it into paragraphs- I have never been able to see the appeal of this. IMHO, it would work better if you just had one paragraph. Even with the line breaks, though, it was a work of art. |
| Dani P 2007-07-14 ch 1, | abusehmm interesting poem. I'm guessing its about abortion..all signs point me to that belief anyway. some big words I cant understand there, but hey I'm still young with lots to learn. Good job with the poem, can't really critique you cause I'm just a mere amatuer. |
| shaddowcat 2007-05-14 ch 1, | abusethis is very interesting... Very descriptive, like, you can see it and very interesting, I like it |
| she smolders 2007-05-11 ch 1, | abuseOh, I don't even know what to say after reading this, it stirs up so many emotions. The second verse expecially took my breath away. |
| surrealphobia 2007-05-08 ch 1, | abuseMidnight in Eden, I've heard of you in alot of forums and have always wanted to read your poetry. The speaker in this poem has lost me, I don't really know what Jeremiah is... I had a eureka moment and thought a FROG! Then I re-read your summary. Oh well I'll continue to try to understand this. I really liked it even though it is a bit confusing for an amatuer like me. Surreal |