Wo! I love this! The rhymes are great! You should...i dunno, put it up in church or something...but that would be mean...anyways, great poem!!

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This is an impressive piece of work.
Have you heard of Unitarian/Universalism (it's one thing)? It might suit as a good religion where discussion would be present for what you brought out in your poetry.

this is the one that i told you i liked!

This has a very powerful message to it. It says what some religions say, and then states your opinion of it. you are a very good poet and author, Sarah!

The length in this poem was nice as were the rhymes. But what truly made it great was the religious aspect. More people need to speak out about what they believe in. Great poem.



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Wow, That is such a good poem. I'm an atheist and I was hoping to find something like this. You made "God" seem kind of evil in "I am told, That we must, Please him now, Before it is too late." Hope to hear more from you.

I really like the writing =] LOL and im glad that you don't believe "his dead son is the only proof they/we have" and "He decides our fate" "we must please him" ect. LOL he is such a good loving God =]