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marsmarionette 2009-04-05 . chapter 1
This flows very well and it is a nice idea to write a poem about. I would add punctuation to it and make the very last line into two different lines: the fawn will grow and / soon learn to leap. Actually I would call it THE fawn instead of just fawn, too. Anyway, really enjoyed it!
Beluga1 2008-02-18 . chapter 1
we have been in the same C2 for a while but i just recently looked at the other poems and i really like urs. no offense to anyone but i dont really like like poems that dont ryme and urs rymes beautifully!
Desiree32 2007-05-10 . chapter 1
I like the gentle tone; the way the words flow reminds me somehow of the sun shining through leaves in a forest... don't know why! :P

The rhythm was sometimes off, but I like the rhyme scheme and the short lines~ A great poem!! ^.^
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