I realy like this history is soo good and I really really would like to know what he is thinking, it's kind of sad then life that lead the people in the underworld, but again they can't be sad, or happy they live like plants they just live... maybe not so bad but personally I prefer to sufer than feel nothing.
wow locked for a aweek in the same room with the love of your life and a underworld education... that sure is gonna lead someone to the funny farm

Wow, this is one of the most unique stories I've read yet. I can see where other people are coming from, with the similarities to equilibrium, but you've created something more here. If I was Steve myself there's no way in hell I'd go in that place, but I like the dialogue and thought patterns you create between the pair, with each one vehemently opposed to the others world. Please keep writing, I'd love to see what happens next.

Superior writing ability, and you wonder why people beg when they see you. Very well done. Most excellent!

This is pro-quality material. Thank you. The only problem is that you aren't getting paid for this. I hope you do find a paying publisher, i you haven't already. I also hope you finish/continue the story. As for the other review that commented that you spent too much time on the interpersonal aspect of the story, it's wrong. Their relationship is believable, not too rushed, and the best aspect of your writing. The tension between them drives the story. Please let me know if you plan to publish this or add more to the story. If you would ever like to read some darker fiction, let me know. And if you ever would like to discuss your craft, again, just email. Thanks again.

Your story is very Equilibrium meets The Giver meets Dark Angel. And since I like all three of those movie, book and television show respectively, I obviously enjoy the concept of this story as well. It is well written, the prologue particularily. I do think that it is a little too fast paced with their feelings for each other (or at least Stephens feelings for Angeline) but I understand why he would develope them so quickly, I still just find it fast. Although the plotline essentially has the potential to be more multi-dimensional you seem to be focusing solely on their relationship, and while that is interesting to an extent, I think a subplot needs an introduction soon. Overall though it is an amazing idea, and it is very well written. Keep it up.

wow this is amazing, a very good writting skills and a plot to die for!! why don't yopuhave more reviews? I totally lovee this please keep going!

-lilion the urban Fairy