Okay. I enjoyed the piece enough to read it all of the way through. I thought that it was a good idea, but it could have been better. The writing is bleak. I wish you'd gone more in depth with your characters. It felt like they just sort of popped up from no where, just things and not people (if that makes sense). There was no real connection, but I could feel some potentional there. I did enjoy it though.

Good story Evan, After reading Dog Eat Dog on your fan fiction page, i decided i had to check this account out. Hmm, I don't really know what to say. A little psychotic, but good none the less. If you're gonna pick up a hitch hiker, you better be carrying a weapon yourself, that's my rule.

aww, the poor lady. xD

I've got to agree. It wasn't very original, but it was nicely written. Got any different ideas? I'm sure you could write them wonderfully if you just had them.

Um...sorry, but this isn't very original. Unless you have Big Plans for this story I find nothing special about it.