Hi there.

This was very well done. (I finally got around to reading it.) A lot is learned about the charactor, even though the chapter is so short, it seems to hold a lot of in depth information about Lenna. I love how you have that good bit of foreshadowing toward the end of the chapter.

The only thing I would suggest...is that you get some description in there. I know I have said this before, but describing what Ellia looks like, as well as Lenna's features, might be a good idea. I feel like I have a good idea of her personality, but I can't picture her in my mind. Maybe a little imagery for her house too?

Well done though, and I really like the long version of Lenna's name, as well as her mothers name.
Night Silver's Whisper

I think I like Lenna. Her personality is verging on cliche, and though so far you seem to be steering clear, I'd be careful. I like the description of her reactions to death, and the cliffie-like teaser bit at the end makes me need to read more.

I'm intrigued!! This sounds great so far, the last paragraph really makes me want to read more. Can't wait until you continue it :)

It's interesting! There are some minor grammar problems, but otherwise it's good!