Wow.

This is a really fantastic piece. The first line that really caught my attention was this one: "...and realize that my heart is just confused."

The reason why this line speaks so deeply to me is because your poem seems to be about the mind and the heart and how, although they're both influenced by the power of love, they're influenced completely differently.

Now, I would assume that one's mind is what becomes confused about love, but you write that it is your heart that is confused. Maybe it's your heart that really knows better than your mind does. Maybe you should trust in your heart and abandon the rational thought of the mind.

Also, I think you made a wonderful choice with your puncuation being primarily commas. Commas extend sentences--extend time. Being confused (what the author is in this poem) extends time, whatever the circumstance. I think this was a good, smart decision.

Great Job. I think you have a wonderful poem here, that is very relatable for many, many people.

Katie

neat-o mosquito! Awesome possum!! in other words good job!


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