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| XxBlackChaosxX 2007-05-13 ch 1,  | abuseThis sounds like something that should be used in a horror movie. LOVE IT!! |
| thecolourgrey 2007-05-12 ch 1, | abusethough your lines are short, you have effectively conveyed a sense of horror. not much, but still it's a good start...however, like before, your "will" is written as "well" and i'm not sure what you want to say using the word "where'er". Maybe "where are"? It's a good effort. |