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All The Rest 2008-05-14 ch 1,	abuseI love this intro. ^_^
All The Rest 2008-05-14 ch 65,	abuseI am left speechless...I don't know what to say...really, truly don't know what to say. I read this all today, it was simply too alluring to leave unfinished. Your creativity leaves me with a nice, gooey, fuzzy and warm feeling, as Elizabeth would put it. Thank you for taking me on an adventure today. I shall look forward to more of your stories! ^-^ Until next time!
All The Rest 2008-05-14 ch 23,	abuseO.K., I am still loyal to you, but to be truly honest, this chapter was a little revolting! XD
All The Rest 2008-05-14 ch 8,	abuseI have only read 8 chapters and I am absolutely AWED by your writing. Huge creativity, liveliness, laugh-out-loud moments and drama, just to spice it all up. I prostrate myself; I'm in for a treat. I have until chapter 65. Insert evil laughter HERE. Oh, goody goody. This reminds me of the 10th Kingdom, only SO much better!
Never Knows Best 2008-05-13 ch 8,	abuseTolkien IS a plaigarist. I'm wondering if you put that little bit in on purpose. If not, you should look up an opera called 'The Ring Cycle'. It's an 18-hour opera by Wagner (I think) about a magic ring that controls other rings, but it's evil so a bunch of people form a fellowship to take the ring back to where it was forged to destroy it. Sound familiar? Yeah. Anywho, this story is super clever and I love it! ^-^ Joy! ~NKB
CanesFanCatty 2008-05-06 ch 65,	abuseI've been reading this story on and off whenever I've gotten any spare time for a while, and I finally finished it! This is the most amazing thing I have ever read, I don't know how you do it, but you are an awesome author and I hope to see your stuff in a book store some day! This story was wonderful, the way everything tied together was just great. I was hooked into this story and your characters were so awesome. I have to admit I was rooting for Phillipe for about the first half of the story, but then I pretty much fell in love with Rafe... he was just so sweet... but I was glad to see Phillipe had his happy ending too! I can't wait 'til the sequel comes back up, I'm excited to read it! You're a fabulous author and I can't wait to read more that you do, don't ever stop writing!
Xonthespot 2008-05-06 ch 3,	abusenot bad, very descriptive almost too descriptive, a bit like a spin off of "The Looking Glass Wars" (in a good way) Also when the story is seen through Elizabeth's eyes the language becomes much more formal and analytical, i thought that was a way interesting way of characterization (Oh yea 9th grade english finally comming handy!) I checked your site out and thought it was amazing!(did u disign it?)Anyway your drawings were incredible! "Rafe" (kind of reminds me of Rumpelstillstkin in a way[if that makes sense] and a werewolf [which he prolly is]) if he were like a real person i think he would kind of look like a mix between Austin Miller and Ryan Merriman(google cause you prolly don't know em') but all in all the story's got me hooked!
Xonthespot 2008-05-05 ch 2,	abusei don't say this much but: i totally want to fall down that hole! anyway i think you've done a great job so far as the plot line and all! it's totally super fantastic!
A Wizard Alone 2008-04-22 ch 65,	abuseRight. Ok. I'm actually typing up a review, which I don't really do because I'm a horrible lurker. But...I just wanted to say this: I LOVED this story. It wasn't just like any other FP story that I would just read and forget about in a couple of months after. I finished this story in about a year ago and the memory of it is still vividly imprinted into my mind. Why? Because it's EPIC. This, this story is one of the best fantasy, romance, and humor stories on FP. I was sobbing when I finished it...^-^; (lol, I'm such a total dork) But anyways, yes, I do agree with you that it needs some editing (particularly in the first chapter, as the cheesiness level is kinda...eh). And (I'm not trying to put any pressure on you but...) I'd really like to see a sort of aftermath story-"thingy" after Mad World. =D So, to recap, 1) loved your story, 2) would love it even better if you edited the beginning chapters just a little, and 3) a sequel-ish thing (or just a one-shot sequel) to Mad World. And just because I'm lame and suck at conclusions, I think I'll just cop out with: Review Concluded.
Arianna Sterling 2008-04-20 ch 1,	abuseLike: I really like how it's so anti-faerie tale at the beginning, and her life sucks. It's funny, for the start of a new take on a story. Dislike: I don't like the last three sentences. I can't quite figure out why, but they seem too... rough, maybe? I think if you placed the first two of them together, and then left the final one on its own, it would be a lot better. Arianna Sterling This is from the review marathon, a part of the review game. Go there- /forum/The_Review_Game/1867/ ( can't link- I suck.)
allecram 2008-04-19 ch 1,	abusehey there, i was just going through your story and i'm not quite finished... i was just wondering, in chapter 21, you mentioned that rafe saved phillipe from the goblin.. wasn't it the gremlin?
nerda 2008-04-10 ch 1, anon.	abuseI don't usually write reviews to stuff that I read on here, because I'm not that much of an active reader.. but I just have to say- WOW. I loved Ordinary World SO much I was sad to see it finish. I started reading it in the middle of my mid-terms [big-mistake] as as soon as I started reading it.. I had to finish.. I couldn't not know what was going on... but it was worth it. So, I just wanted to say thankyou to you for writing such a great story that took me out of my miserabl life into the much more interesting one of Elizabeth Potter. :] I'm gunna go now and read some more of your stuff. Take care.
.J0ana. 2008-04-07 ch 30,	abuseWOOHOO! Go Rafe! i love him! Phillipe is blah. anyways, the witch is starting to scare me. awesome story!
.J0ana. 2008-04-04 ch 15,	abusewell...in the last review i left like 10 min. ago i forgot to mention that i went to your website and saw all the drawings you had there about the characters. i thought they were spectacular! you can write and draw! i wish i could do that!
.J0ana. 2008-04-04 ch 14,	abusei know this story was written a couple months ago, but i had to review. this story is AMAZING! the plot is so intense. all the characters are wonderful. im rooting for Rafe to win her heart because he needs some happiness and because its not even his fault he was born a Stiltskin. the thing with working for the purple eyed witch is a little shady, but i dont think hes going to do anything bad. what can i say? i like bad boys. ANother thing, i love how you used all the characters like Sleeping Beauty, Red Riding Hood, etc. there own background and life other than the happily ever after of the fairy tales. making the pixies ** was hilarious. it kinda reminded me of Tinkerbell even though i think shes a fairy. Anyways...this story definatly deserved that SKOW award!

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