for me this is true. no one ever notices, and even if they did no one would care

This is something that truly speaks to a person. This is something that I believe many people can feel akin to. It is very seldom that society will notice a person in trouble in need. Everybody tries to put up a brave front and yet secretly, a tiny portion of us hopes somebody will notice the pain and come to the rescue and provide the love and care that is so much desired yet so much denied. I hope that times have gotten better for you if this poem is based on reality.

Cheers

Lost in A World of Pain

You should ever try to publish your works in a book. I know I would by one. If you are interisted here's two sites for publishing.

I love your poetry it's awsome.

:O I am in awe! YOu take so few words...and suddenly like POW! you have just created a masterpiece! Amazing, Trully Amazing! I love this poem. It really speaks to me! I know that feeling really well...(especially lately...but we won't talk about that,) Anyways, great job you had a couple of typos though like on your 4th line where it says: "And when tears toll down my checks" checks should be cheeks. also on your eighth line where it reads: "and place it one this misplaced face." one should be on. other than that it was remarkable. thanks for reviewing me too! i hope you reach your goal by the end of the month to by the way.

angel953

That's pretty sad, but descriptive. (Relatable, as usual.) Great job.

"and my soul is dead." Haven't we all thought that before? This really is pure angst, but it is good angst! Well, talanted I mean. It was really beautiful and flowed really well. I loved the images you created. It made me feel so...alone. Great job as always, and God bless.