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| envirofriendlykrissooo 2008-07-01 ch 1,  | abuseThis is absolutely adorable! Totally natural and very real, this is well done. Good job! |
| AlbanianAtHeart 2008-06-15 ch 1, | abuseVery awesome! I love the capturing of childhood in this short work. I love how the little girl acts, it's so natural! Thanks for the review! ~AlbanianAtHeart |
| Cupid's Jinx 2008-04-19 ch 1, | abuseHehe! Aww! That was so sweet! My little sister used to have a pair of star sunglasses Cuteness -x- |
| Zonne 2008-04-18 ch 1, | abuseThis is a fantastic charming story. The little girl is darling and funny and bright and lucky to have such a sweet baby-sitter. The fact that you dedicated it to Mia just makes it that much sweeter. You have a wonderful talent for painting a charming portrait. I esp. liked the yellow star shaped glasses. Perfect touch. |
| The.Wizard.Pen.Dragon 2008-04-18 ch 1, | abuseThis is SO cute! I have to admit that I get rather scared around little kids, but I can't help but love it when they do stuff like this! Thanks for all the AWESOME mental pictures of a little girl all dressed up and ready to go to the park! Write on! Pen.Dragon |
| x day x dreamer x 2008-01-06 ch 1, | abuseits so cute i love it~! not much else to say... =] ~sara |
| Methuselah Renard 2007-11-25 ch 1, | abuseThat was a cute story. You've taken an ordinary suburban experience and made it into something special. Very readable and special. I like how you planted your plot around a simple daily task, resulting in an effect similar to a snapshot rather than a full-blown and epic story. |
| Jordan A. Masters 2007-11-06 ch 1, | abuseThis is without a doubt the cutest thing I've ever read. I totally believe that Olivia is almost six years old - you pull off the description so well I'm seriously jealous. (I stink at describing little kids.) I love the names for her feet, too - they sound just like names a little kid would give to things. I saw a couple of tiny, tiny little errors, but nothing that absolutely jumped out and screamed at me "Look at me, I'm an error!" Just some minor spelling and grammatical stuff. This is an awesome story. Good job and thanks for the laugh. ~Jordi-Li |
| GrannyP 2007-11-03 ch 1, | abuseAw! Children are always so cute and innocent. Great job with expressing this. GrannyP |
| Twilight Starr 2007-11-03 ch 1, | abuseLol, this was an amusingly cute piece. Great job! ~Twilight Starr~ |
| BeautifulAssassin 2007-09-11 ch 1, | abuseaw...kids are so cute...although I've never met one who has named her feet. Keep writing! |
| Chidori Nadare 2007-08-20 ch 1, | abuseIt's so cute. :) Naming your own feet, weird but adorable. I really liked your descriptions about her and using her age as excuses. *faves* Keep writing! |
| SirScott 2007-08-09 ch 1, | abuseThat was cute. Kids really do the darnest things. ~SirScott |
| Ramenluver 2007-07-12 ch 1, | abuseThat was absolutely precious. Though I can't say I ever acted like that when I was little. I was a tomboy. ^_^ -Ramen |
| SpeedingCars8 2007-07-12 ch 1, | abusehaha that was so cute! i think it's fine the way it is; you don't need to change it at all. sometimes writers can stare at their work for too long and think something is wrong with it, even if the readers find it to be perfect the way it is. great job! |