Oh, this is really good! I love how she gets controlled by the evil person! Great work!

the whole idea was awesome, the thing is...well, this is just my point of view, as i was saying before, the characters need to be emphatically individualized...that's the only flaw as i see it... try putting yourself in your character's shoes...

on the other hand, i'm beginning to like Aowin...

see ya next time~len

it spins so fast...your characters must be given a bit of emphasis, or at least an individualized tone of their own...Aowin should be described with more vibrant words...
although i could okay the way you describe movements, hell it was more than okay, it was good,very good...