 poetic abortion 2007-05-12 . chapter 1♥
All of it. Particularly, these lines:
"i want to believe i was made to dance in white dresses"
& "i want to believe i was made to dance with you"
The thing is, you drive the whole point back into the poem with the last line with the thought started in the first line--and it is called something technical, I know, but I'm trying to stick to the English language at the moment--and I love that, in particular, because it sticks and makes the whole poem click, makes me want to cry (which I'm trying hard not to because, you know, I don't want to stain the pages of my Spanish textbook and, coincidentally, FAIL the test so, um, yeah).
Also, this is beyond amazing; I love it to pieces and beyond. I love it.
- Noelle |