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Kat 2007-05-16 . chapter 1
Oh, pretty. The first three lines create such a vivid, yet poetic (duh!) image in my mind; very stark and lonely. Well done. I realize you most likely did this on purpose, but the "Passers-by pass you by-" line sounds awkward to my ears. Again, though, well done.
and *HUGS*
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