I liked the subtle rhyming of this piece and the way it didn't overwhelm the words at all - instead, it acted to keep them in check without restricting them at all. It's a well-structured piece and I hope you won't be offended if I call it sweet.

This has a sort of innocent, sweet touch to it that's very nice. I like how at some point you pause in the rhyming scheme, and then take it up again. The rhymes didn't really seem necessary, but I guess it worked. Anyways, it's nice and cute.