Wow, what a wonderful story. I kind of regret waiting until the contest was over to have read this, and furthermore remorse over having only read it with a morbid sense of curiosity as to the quality of the stories that placed higher than mine. XD

This story is amazing! When I finished the first chapter, I was kind of happy, but kind of sad, because I hadn't realized there were chapters to follow. It was like I had a feeling of relief that "Final" didn't truly foretell the coming of a tragedy.

The ending, though not what I was hoping for after Ch.3 (being the sappy person that I am) really works for the story, and I think the entire piece is nothing short of amazing. Very, very good! I look forward to losing to you in more contests, just so I'll feel motivated to read more of your work! XD

bai bai~

Wow... just... it ends so quickly but it's one of those endings where that works. if that makes sense. There's no need for any more, so it ends in the right place.

Anyway, cool. Over and out,

:) CD

...No... *tear* no! that SUCKS!

But at least it's not the end.

:) CD

I personally like the song that starts the story. It's cool.

Anyway, I like this. Though 'final story' sounds decidedly ominous.

:) CD

Hey, I'm really, extremely leaving a review. Mostly 'cause I luv ya. NEWSIES. Ah, anyway.

There are few mistakes, it has a great flow, interesting details, and the movement of the plot is great. For such a long page, I'm not left going, "Okay... I wish this chapter were shorter, it's not doing anything."

Rather, I was hooked all the way through. So, I'm looking forward to the ending. (I just hope it's Happy! XD Is that terrible? I love Teeg (lol) and Ellyx, so I've got my fingers already crossed...)

Anyway, see you next chapter. And on Gaia. Yeah.

...NEWSIES!

Ooh one of my favorite subjects, can't wait for you to write more. First third person in awhile huh? I would never know.

Ever jealous of your skills,

Rachee