NO NO YOU HAVE TO WRITE ANOTHER CHAPTER! Oh...uh...yeah hi I read your story "A Story with Many Tales" So I decided to check out your other stories! lol, anyways this story is really cool you should totally write another chapter! You don't have to, just the advice of a crazy reviewer!

I always like a good virtual world story, and this one has a decent beginning. Bao is interesting, as is the world she plays in. The biggest problem I see is the large 'info-dump' at the beginning of the chapter. I'd like to see the details of the virtual world revealed slowly and inside the narrative rather than all at once. I'd like to see what you do with the story now that the groundwork is laid.