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| FreakierThanThou 2007-07-18 ch 1,  | abuseCute! I like the way you write it, so that I can totally picture everything you describe. Also, the lines about the rocks and the sun staring each other down were really well-written. I liked that image. The third paragraph is traditionally where I put concrit, but I can't think of any except why is the word "Loon" written at the bottom? And now I go back to ranting about how amazing it is. I love it. It's great. Keep writing, -Freaky |