Careful with the redundancies ;) The change of scene happened a bit too fast. But still looking good! Cliffhanger D:..

Continue? :3

PS: If you have time please read over my story too. Thankies :3!

Oh VP! You're great, mentioning me in your Author's Note and everything... it's just nice to see that all my "suggestions" were actually listened to... oh yeah, by the way, good job on the whole, "Can't save H's life because the big guy couldn't carry him, etc." It works, and isn't as dramatic.

You had better be finished with that second chapter soon! No long waits than slow die-offs like the fates of your other stories...

Domozao~* p.s. what happened to all your other ones?