aw I loved it! You know how I love short stories etc, and this is really well written. It just shows that ideas don't need to be dragged out, they can just be short and sweet, and all the better for it.

Really suits the song I'm listening to as well

I loved it

wow! don't delete this, this is amazing! seriously, wow! you know scumbag, you are really good at writing, so matter how you protest that you aren't, and if you delete this i will be anger because it is so good!

who's point of view is it from? is it connected to anyone in the story? or is it just a one off type chapter? wa, tell me! it's very good though, so either write more of this or write more anyway :D it's very good my friend, i like it loads!

That was so good, i feel all empty and emotionless now. It was really well written, and don't delete it. urhh, i have the hiccoughs so I can't concentrate properly. but it was very good!

aww that's really sweet, i didn't get the first part, but yeah, that's sad. goobyes are important

WA THAT'S BRILLIANT.
I'm astonished. You can write in first person, which is like the most amazing thing ever. Also the metaphors were really good! That's an amazing story, and is making me feel somewhat humbled to write now >< But no, it was brilliant!