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| StarEyed14 2008-07-01 ch 7,  | abuseaww come on! for some reason I thought that there were more chapters lol! |
| StarEyed14 2008-07-01 ch 1, | abuseI just love it! |
| Miss K Ree 2008-05-20 ch 7, | abuseIm enjoying your story. |
| Katherine-the-greate 2008-04-20 ch 5, | abuseI like the changes you made at the beginning. you might want to use the vertical bar lines to seperate your scenes. you can find them at the options part when you are editing your chapter to post. You might want to fix the part where you call her cousin her brother. I hope you update soon. =] great work =] |
| tlw1 2008-04-17 ch 4, | abuseI was glad to see an update for your story. Please give us another update as soon as you can! |
| Katherine-the-greate 2008-04-17 ch 4, | abuseyay-yay-yay! you updated! OMG I'm so happy. The story has finally moved on. I don't quite understand the very end of the chapter but everything else was wonderful. I like meeting the lady and the fighting glimse. great work. I can't wait to read more of this story. Email me if you need anything. =] |
| Katherine-the-greate 2007-07-12 ch 2, | abusePLEASE UPDATE! Katherine-the-greate |
| Katherine-the-greate 2007-06-17 ch 1, | abuseI really like this story!! I love your characters and I love the setting. Please update soon! =) |
| tlw1 2007-06-01 ch 3, | abuseI just discovered your writing tonight and I've enjoyed it. I hope you'll continue your stories soon! Your characters are fun to read about and I've always had a weakness for a big, strong knight! |
| Amber Richardson 2007-05-18 ch 3, | abuseHey, once again a very good start to a very good story. There are a few spelling errors that are easy to overlook, so I wouldn't worry about them too much. Don't worry about using language from our time when writing a historical piece, especially the time frame you're writing in. I would much rather hear our speech than a lot of dosts and prithees and shakespeare stuff like that.Your description of the surroundings and the characters are really well done. My only suggestion would be watch what descriptive word you use. Such as in chapter one when you said "His body was muscle on top of sleek muscle and he reeked of power." The word 'reeked' is a negative descriptive word when you're looking for a positive one. Think about trying words such as eminated/ing, encompassed, stuff like that. I find that if I type something in a word document then look at the thesaurus, I can find a lot of really good words that work better than the ones I've chosen. So far it's coming along really nicely and I can't wait to read more. Happy writing:D |
| Kendyl Burch 2007-05-17 ch 3, | abuseCouple of really good chapters ur writing is improving with every chapter u write, keep up the good work. |
| Katherine-the-greate 2007-05-17 ch 3, | abuseGreat story! I love the characters already. The plot is great and the romance nor the daily tasks are exagerated. I love your story! Please write more and post soon! |
| Kendyl Burch 2007-05-15 ch 1, | abuseHey like this story, very different from everything i've read before. Keep up the good work |
| Lavi R 2007-05-15 ch 1, | abuseI like the story so far! I am curious to see where this is going!! i hope you update soon!! :D Lavi |