I'm conflicted because I really like this poem even though the style reminds me of so many other things. "(I hope you don’t mind that you match)" is wonderful, by the way. Keep writing.

Not entirely sure that I understand, but from what I do, I like it. Interesting and good flow, and some well-thought imagery.

Looks like one of those things a person whipped up in ten minutes.

Still, those are the best kinds.