I enjoyed reading this, but 'twould be better if there was more to it than an intro (though I 'spose that sounds kinda' funny coming from me, he who abandoned his own story). How 'bout this, if I continue writing Kaloue, then you continue writing this? Oh yeah, I also kinda' forgot your newer of the two accounts >.< So if you could let me know, that'd be nice.

Oh my god! You didn't tell me you were back! How could you? *grits teeth*

Just kidding, but I was honestly surprised and happy to see that you posted your story again. As I've told you before, your descriptions are absolutely lovely. In fact, I believe they've become even better than they were, if that's possible. Everything is beautiful in your story, as always. I admire you for the talent.

I also saw some differences in the story now. Ajinbi's grandmother is much nicer than she was in the first version. Everything has changed and become more gorgous. The only thing you should watch out for is using the word "she". You've used it a bit too often in some of the paragraphs, but it isn't that serious.

By the way, how did it go? You said that you were planning to turn the story in as an assignment. I hope your teacher gave you a good mark on it. Until next time then, I guess. =)

Beautiful introduction! I love your style and can't wait for an update!

Aww, poor Aijinbi..

Okay, um.. this has potential, and I'm hoenstly surprised at the lack of reviews thus far. Personally, I'm a fan of ancient Japanese culture, so this greatly appeals to me. ^^

I'm looking forward to the next chapter, since I'm assuming that Juubi will be featured somewhere in it as well as Aijinbi.

-adds to alert-

~ Much love,
Bleached Roses