Okay, I adore this story. It's very Outsiders and I love your characters. They're strong, realistic and biting. I hope you finish it!

So sad to see that you haven't updated in like a year. I hope that maybe you'll get inspiration and start writing this story again. It's so fantastic. I wish guys like Tray went to my school, i might actually have something to entertain me. Love your writing and hope you continue

When are you going to finish this story?!

This is one hot story! It has such sex appeal that it's difficult to stop reading. Your characters dialog was handled well and realisticly. I didn't spot any grammar or punctuation errors and your plot is coming along at a nice pace - not too quickly that it feels rushed, but not slow enough to feel bogged down. Great work!

This was one of the best starts to a story I think I've ever read. It had sarcasticly funny moments, serious scenes, well developed characters, and the makings of a great plot to boot! I can not wait until I have more time to continue reading! Great job!

i know you said that you're reworking a whole new crowd but i was just wondering if the old version is still available for download or to buy from because i would love to buy it.

update please?

Hey, you said you wanted reviews on grammatical errors, so I thought I'd just say that you're really inconsistent when it comes to commas and periods before quotes. Here are some examples copied and pasted directly from your chapter.

“Matthews.” Tray greeted smoothly, the cool façade slipped back in place.
“Well…yeah.” She said simply.
“Get out.” I clipped out.
“Oh, you got the package. We both know that, but you have crap for quality.” I drawled back and smirked. I didn’t care that it was a hit below the belt.
“So get out.” I said smoothly.
“So the one loss didn’t hurt that bad.” I said, sardonically.
“She’s down here.” Mandy called out, bouncing down the stairs. “Hey.” She exclaimed, plopping beside me.
“Leave her alone, Mandy. The girl’s frigid, she said no.” Tray said in low tones.

There are a lot more. I only went halfway down.

A lot of those periods should be commas.

I love this story! It's so badass:] PLEASE update soon! I really want to know what happens in the end.

This is a really story but are you going to update anytime soon or has it been completely dropped?

I love this story. Please update soon! :)

hey,, this is a good story..i think u shiuld update soon!

will u ?

UPDATE, UPDATE, UPDATE! Please?

She never met up with Grayley.

I admit, I'm not Taryn's biggest fan but then I guess that's a compliment to your writing in your way, that you used just enough detail/dialogue to make me feel estranged from her. Normally if an author tries to make her main character "bitchy", i just die laughing at her attempt. But here, I didn't and that meant ur writing didn't suck. It was VERY GOOD. I like you as a writer but for this story alone, I'm gonna stop here-

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