Hi
Well that was like cold water in winter. Hello reality.
You could seriously turn that into a story too. I mean come on, she has "naturally" neon orange hair, how's that for unique? Really, I can totally see something here. If you don't want it, I'll have it.
*Mackenzie

It was a good rant thought. Poetry isn't about making it pretty, but about putting your emotions on page. Some people say that grammar or language comes first, but for me it is all about the feeling. If you really put yourself into your poetry, it will show. And I think you did that. Great job.