Saw you label chapter 2, so perhaps you could do so for 1 as well.
Some interesting ideas. Could have done so with more in-depth descriptions and to dive it that touch more on the emotions/feelings/thoughts of the characters.
Some of the ideas could be presented a bit better and bought out more.
Anyhow. Cheers.

This is really just interesting, and I'll be on the lookout for the next chapter!