i didn't expect something so powerful. i feel like i'm walking out with a black eye. you are constantly amazing me; that is a fact.

it has a good flow and diction. the words are weaved very nicely. keep on going.

Short poetry is my favorite, especially when it's as concise and powerful as this.

That was interesting. It reminds me a lot of this certain style...oh, what's it called...imagism?...symbolism?...derived from the haiku... not quite sure, but it's cool.

Aiden

Thas was a really nasty image, but it definately put out a statement. The last line especially. Great job.