His words cut into me, which is talent, because I'm not even there.
The last line just burns.

Isn't that how it always ends? Words get in the way. ((Too bad poetry is so damn pretty.))
I love this. It's beautiful and desperate. Two things that should always be together.

you dare, and that is amazing.

STUNNING.
You wanna know why almost every single other reviewer has used that word?
Because it's true.

If I had to highlight my favourite phrases..
Wait, hang on, I don't think I've got enough space to copy the whole piece here.

Keep writing, and someday the earth will fall at your feet.

You will never cease to amaze me. Wow, this is amazing. (emphasize on that, please) I have nothing else to say. Maybe...I just love this, that's all.

Definite fav.

saccharine is the perfect title for this. just perfect.

the more i think about it the less i have to say...so just wow. you are beyond talented.

gahh--i have no words. absolutely positively no words left. it's just beyond marvelous and i think you already know that.

Wow. The prose is magnificently written, silky smooth but scattered. I love its poetic quality, the way you write in sort of fragmented bits, inserting thoughts and other little snippets which make the whole thing so enigmatic- like the readers can't quite reach out and grasp what you're telling us. I love that dreamy quality you have in your writing, its like there's a world in there that we're not really a part of. And the little scenes that we do see are so short but effective in an achy way just leave you wanting more.
You're clearly talented. I like the way you use your words, and brackets. The structure and the craft of this is just brilliantly done.

Incredible. You use such original ideas, like watermelon popsicles (can you actually get those anywhere? I've never heard of them before). I love all the visuals I get from this. Just so nicely done. Keep writing! :)

the second on is a little scattered,
but, again,
so damn great.

this is goodness.

i love your work. i love the vagueness, the sense of enigma. beautiful xx

Hmm...stunning isn't the word I would use, but it was still good. Nice work.

It's funny how almost everybody who has reviewed this has used the word 'stunning'. It really is the truth though. Strangely, this one relates to me in the worst possible way. Hauntingly beautiful, domestically-yet-ethereally-austere, and as always, fantastic

I am going to try to use a different word than "stunning," just to be different.

That said, I do love how you string unique combinations of words together the alliteration and allusion... I know I've said it before, but your writing is just lovely.

Also, I have a predilection for ambiguous endings, which you do so well. Very nice.