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Lush Mellifluence
2007-10-21
ch 1,
abuseLol, if I were Garrett, I would ask Jamie whether he was unhappy with me, and why he was so insistent on changing my looks.

Think carefully before you answer, Jamie. You don't want a huge red hand-print on your cheek where I slapped the shit out of you.

Hahaha!

Anyway, yes, it was definitely cute!

Warm regards,
Jake
Seadrance
2007-06-01
ch 1,
abuseWere you hyper when you wrote this? It's cute, but very hyper. I like it, just that Jamie sounds (even for a gay boy) too girly. Try softening his hyperness down with a bit more shyness, possibly, or a little seriousness.

I love them both, very cute, and I hope that this wasn't too discouraging...

Tess
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