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| Lush Mellifluence 2007-10-21 ch 1, | abuseLol, if I were Garrett, I would ask Jamie whether he was unhappy with me, and why he was so insistent on changing my looks. Think carefully before you answer, Jamie. You don't want a huge red hand-print on your cheek where I slapped the shit out of you. Hahaha! Anyway, yes, it was definitely cute! Warm regards, Jake |
| Seadrance 2007-06-01 ch 1, | abuseWere you hyper when you wrote this? It's cute, but very hyper. I like it, just that Jamie sounds (even for a gay boy) too girly. Try softening his hyperness down with a bit more shyness, possibly, or a little seriousness. I love them both, very cute, and I hope that this wasn't too discouraging... Tess |