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| painted.music 2007-05-18 ch 1,  | abusekonichiwa That was a cool last line. =) Again, absolutely love it -- because how could anyone like me NOT love something written so strongly and so beautifully? One comment: That first line is a bit confusing. You said, "I live in a small town where gay people are just looked down upon ... or anything different really isn't their thing (etc)." That sounds like it could mean that the word "their" is talking about the gay people. I understood what you really meant, of course; but I just thought I'd mention that. *shrug* Have a good weekend, and never stop writing! -Shan- |
| Hidden Sword of Truth 2007-05-18 ch 1, | abuseHey! I justed wanted to stop by and say that this essay type of rant could also be connect to the last poem that I wrote called, "American Has A Problem, A Big Problem." I guess I just wanted to say that everyone is great as a person no matter what color or size or shape... *TSP |