Wow. Poor Gabriel...very nice writing though!

Very nice, and VERY different! I liked it a lot!

Again, I loved it! Didn't find any errors this time...

Once again, very nice! Just one question...did you mean to say 'birog' or something else?

LOVED IT! That was REALLY good, I just found one error:


"Leon’s window was always remain open."

I believe you mean that Leon's window was always open or that Leon's window would always remain open.

What's a birog?
The angel stuff confused me: "What if I didn't even try to start Angel, let alone Seraphim?" Darker seems like an odd name, thopugh it fits since he's described as "cold, manipulating, violent and sociopathical". What does it mean "caught after our first act of justice?" I'm guesing that this is all part of a larger work that I haven't read yet. There is one s in "confussion."

This sentence doesn't make sense: "Three, that leon's window was always remain open." I don't think "remain" is needed. By "vine fence" do you mean trellis? Leon is cute when he's asleep.