i loved this. it was really good and i think you should continue it as a story. good work.

whoa. harsh!
but i've felt this way before. i would never condemn any of my friends like that, but the whole jealousy thing has definitely happened to me. i could relate to this though, in some ways, sadly. but that's only on my part; my best friends have never been a bitch like Ashlin. xD
anyway, i really liked this, especially the contemporary scene-vibe or whatever you wanna call it. and, oh yeah, the entire concept.
i wanna know what happens to liv and cale! and cale is an amazing name by the way.
tommy reminds me of rugrats.

I think the ending should be something about how she realized she didn't want to be like Ashlin or something else, but it's your story.

I thought it was good. It's just like you said the ending is okay, but something is a bit off about it. If I knew how you could fix it I would tell you.

Good luck with writing, this story, and life.

Have an excellent day.

Best wishes!

~Twilight Starr~

I'd really liketo know how they even became friends because she really hates her, with a passion. I mean sometimes I get mad but i wouldn't wish a person dead. Anyway it was really well written and it really drew me in. Poor what's her face. Kinda sad kinda funny though in a way.

-Genesis F.T

Hmm...good. A little bit dark. But good. And I do agree, the ending seemed kind of sudden, as if the story isn't meant to end there or something. I don't know.

Anyway, great fic. And hopefully you start a long, lengthy story next so that I can read it and review it. You're on the one-shot train and I'm urging you to get off of it.

I liked it overall. The ending was kind of...flat, for my tastes. I really don't know how to fix it without changing the entire story, which would be a travesty. Good job, hunnybunny. I could swear I smelt the drama a'brewing.