Reviews for The Grey Generation

Reviews For: The Grey Generation

The Hermitess 2007-11-27 ch 1,	abuseM. It could be a bit longer, but I know how difficult it can be to lengthen prose when it feels like you should be done. xDD I really loved this: "You created the grey generation, the lost, unnamed children that were sent to the front with a sword in hand and told to fight in your name." Actually, that entire paragraph was lovely. Keep working on writing prose; so far its both poignant and beautiful!
Eagle Seance 2007-10-03 ch 1,	abuseI think your poetic skills enhance your prose skills. As for this piece, I liked the honesty and truthfulness expressed here.
sin olvido 2007-06-04 ch 1,	abuse"What inside you compels you to mourn the thing you wished to achieve?" -- my favourite line. I loved this... possibly beyond belief. It's sad how we all wish for a utopia, religious or not, and then when we get it, it turns out to be hellish and not worth the fight. I love this theme, and you did it justice. I'm impressed. :) In the second paragraph (the one under the opening line, I mean), you tended to use the passive voice a bit too much. But other than that, I loved it. On my favourites! ~Cristina
Ink'd-Reality 2007-05-20 ch 1,	abuseNice, Sammy. Very nice. I'm going to start with the good points. Nice use of language (though I would have liked to see one or two more metaphors and such, but hey, that's just me). Good repetition of the happy ending theme. I also like the way it starts off as perfect, idyllic, etc, and then gradually takes a darker tone. It actually compelled me to read on, which was good. I do love the irony at the end. Bad points... Actually, I can't really find very many. Wow. I'm losing my touch. I would have liked to see a little more poetic language in places, seeing as this is prose, after all. And I felt that you could have accentuated the picturesque fairytale ending some more. Maybe throw in some more stuff about princesses and knights in shining armour - you know what I mean. Other than that, good. You should try more prose, you're good at it.
Stella-Polaris 2007-05-20 ch 1,	abuseWow.. this is good in the sense that you can transform the typical "Happily ever after" ending into something else. Just a little error. You said "...You watched the glorious relvolution begun on your doorstep..." should be BEGIN. Otherwise good!
deadrosepetals 2007-05-19 ch 1,	abuseIt was pretty good. I liked how it showed the turning of the kingdom. Anyway I liked.
Professional Dreamer 2007-05-19 ch 1,	abuseWow. This is a tapestry of writing. You have filled this to overflowing with beautiful imagery and extended themes. If this is only your second piece of prose, I want to see your third!
Microwave background 2007-05-19 ch 1, anon.	abuseNothing significant to add, but I'd like to chime in and say I enjoyed reading this.

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