Beautifully written
Look from her face and from her eyes
Lest you should fall to your demise.

Woah. That actually gave me shivers. Very nice poem!

arg! I'm very jealous of this poem. This is what I want to write like, but just don't seem to be able to.I envy your writing skills!

btw-thanks for reviewing my poem

wow love the description! it is great! keep writing like this an you'll become an author! great work
~impressed lookin4nemo~

For some reason, I am thinking of The Rime of the Ancient Mariner by Samuel Taylor Coleridge. This poem is as fascinating and captivating as that piece.

It's very foreboding and epiclike. It reminds me of the poems in LOTR. Keep writting.

*shiver* This is really good...reminds me of J. R. R. Tolkien's ballads. But who is "she"?

it's like you're really telling an old folk story. you got me fooled there. haha. in other words, well written.

Very nice! I really liked the rhyme and the story line, its all very well written. Good job!

konnichi wa

Wow, I really loved this! I haven't read a rhyming poem in quite a while, mostly because on fictionpress the majority aren't my type of poem - cutesy or whatever. Just what I used to write. :P

But this was excellent! It's the type of poem that is perfect to rhyme, despite the fact that it's not cutesy. It's absolutely perfect! Wonderful. :D

*adds to favs*

Zaijen
-Shan-

This is a stunning poem. The rhyming scheme is thought out well and fits so perfectly, I love it.

this is so beautiful
and it wraps up perfectly

"Return from paths that perils trail
Lest all goes down to no avail."

wow

The rhyme scheme is very well thought out. I especially like the last two lines "Return from paths that perils trail/Lest all goes down to no avail." We all must beware the temptresses in our lives, don't we now?

Great structure, you're very talented.