 WithoutException 2009-03-26 . chapter 1This is an amazing piece of writing. It was confusing, at first, because I wasn't sure who was talking/doing what, but once I figured it out, I liked the layout. I agree with an earlier reviewer that the actual article should be longer (I don't know about funnier, because this isn't a particularly funny story). And Grant's bit at the beginning kind of makes me not take him seriously (the whole future-Grant thing).
I actually read this story yesterday, without reviewing, and it stuck in my head, so I felt the need to come back and say something. Your portrayal of "Sammy Stalker" was awesome. Definitely allowed me to see him as someone to be pitied, and a clear case for the insanity defense. And Daye's pseudo-mental breakdown at the end is absolutely tragic. The closing line of her section "I have a boyfriend. His name is Kyle," really shows that she has lost all sense of herself.
And to close: Yay! Good job. |
 Lily Llynn 2007-10-14 . chapter 1It's not cliche, and I like it. (: All the POVs are very different and you portrayed them well, but it got a bit confusing (i.e.: The Gossip. XD). Other than that, it was good. (: |