Once again i wanted to tell you how great this story is and how you are a great writer.

I liked your story it was really good although you might want to check over it there are some minor typos and spelling errors.

The story is quite good and progressing well, however it will be much better if you can replace names with his, him, her or any third person type of nouns. You are writing in third person perspective so i don't think you will encounter problem doing that.

It will enhance your story and make reading it more fun.

Hi, cool story. I like what you did with the school and you have good descriptions.