My goodness. I just got around to reading this. I laughed so hard I nearly hit my head on the computer screen and got a concusion from all my twitching. Absolutely brilliant.

~Kindali

I like it. The imagery is engrossing. My only problem is with "vampire restrainer." It wouldn't be my top choice of potentially usable phrases, but it fits. All in all, good job.

Keep writing.

Bread, I think you have anger issues with the world. Serious issues.

On that note, I will say that there is a painful number of images in this poem. Kinda makes me hurt just reading it. Then again ... I'm pretty sensitive to that sort of thing. Great imagry. When you can feel the pain, it's a good thing.

'I still bleed more than emos' is the greatest line in the history of great lines. Well written, Bread.

Felicia.

What I like about this poem is that even though it rhymes, the rhymes don't sound forced. Most poems that rhyme sound so cheesy because you can tell the author worried more about the rhyme than anything else. This isn't like that. This reads like someone saying something that just happens to rhyme, coincidentally. Very good!


- Lisa

haha I love this. It's amusing.