Stuff I don't like:

'And forever it will stay,'

-this line just has a different vibe than the rest of the poem. i think you just need to reword it to say something along the lines of: And it will stay forever.

That's all i didn't like, but when I read the last line the first time, I read it as: 'Oh, I want you there.' just thought i would mention that. it's not something that should be changed but it ends the poem on a different note.

Bring on the next poem!