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Reviews For: Capricia the Worrywart
HopefulAuthor 2007-06-12 . chapter 1
This is a very good story! I really liked the OCD POV. However, I think you should continue it. Tell about the therapy and what happened to the girl. :)

If you're interested in personal LD POV's, a good autobiographical work is "My Thirteenth Winter" by Samantha Abeel. It's about a young woman who had dyscalcua during childhood, and into adulthood.
RuathaWehrling 2007-05-27 . chapter 1
This is a cute story and really puts OCD in a light that other kids can understand. Well done!

From a more technical perspective, your grammar was good throughout. I found one small thing:

"Ms. Eugene called her parents." -- This either needs to be "calls" (if it's happening now) or "has called" (if it happened before this scene), to stick with the verb tense you've used throughout.

Besides that, I have no complaints. :) I really liked how you showed Capricia's thoughts, showing how even her seemingly-illogical actions have a rational explanation. Well done!

--Ruatha
xXRavenShadowXx 2007-05-21 . chapter 1
That was pretty good about explaining the OCD stuff. Good job, this story was nice.
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