It was a good chapter. I like the character names here. Good work.

This is just a suggestion but I think you should scrap the book two part of your story. It;s just a suggestion remember but I think the reason you may not be getting as many reviews is because people see this a sequal. And since they didn't read book one they may not read this one. Also I suggest giving you chapters titles. A snappy chapter title might be that extra push you need to give your reader to continue. Hope this helps.

Sorry it took so long for me to get to the next chapter. The story isn't that bad I'm surprised you don't have many more reviews. I would change that 0. Maybe something else to show scenes have changed. Though that is your choice. Other then that good work.

One thing I noticed in the prologue is that you never describe what a sprite is. Maybe I missed it. Other then that good job.

Hey, just read the prologue. Whilst the description is great, I have to say that I had to read it twice to fully understand what was happening. I found it quite confusing. Firstly, is this supposed to be two scenes because it needs some sort of divider in between if it is. I'm assuming there is supposed to be a break after "completely different". That is the first thing I'd edit.
Secondly, some of your sentences appear too long whilst other appear too short. I'm being critical I know but I like it when the passage flows, it makes it easier to digest. Not many readers will go back and read the piece again. Anyway, I'm going to continue on as you have many more chapters to read. I couldn't believe my eyes when it said you didn't have a review, it's absurb when you consider the amount of content you have. Feel free to blast my work apart.