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Reviews For: Beach Jam Musings

Kissan Silma
2007-06-09
ch 1,
abuseI liked this one. When you set it off with a question, it was kind of an in-your-face question, unusual but cool. I liked your launguage too, like "this story is written half way through", and "hairline fractures spiderwebbing my body". "I'm not what I pretend to be, confident in me" flows very nicely. Although the end of every stanza ending in italics annoyed me while I was reading it, maybe if you did italics at the end of one, skipped a stanza, then italics again; I dunno. Zen as a single line stood out too. Nice job, I like your work.
Undrahas
2007-05-21
ch 1,
abuse...there is no comment on this poem.
but here is something for you it kind of reminds me of me because sometimes i feel broken because i feel like me and my best friend are drifting apart.
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