 Jesse the Storyteller 2007-06-19 . chapter 1I think this "Strong Woman" story tells the story of a truly strong woman more so than your other ones (or at least the two I've read). I like this one a LOT.
Although... I've noticed you try to use words like nary and naught, and they sound so unnatural in your writing. It's like you're trying to make them sound old and poetic, but they come across as forced. Your style is amazing, you don't need to throw those words in there, haha. "He knew naught of her she received everything he did." This sentence makes almost no sense. I think there's a period missing?
This is my favourite of the three I've read. :)
-Jesse |