very intence for so few words.

What a wonderful and explicit image! Seriously, I really loved this one. You are great with haiku. I wish I didn't suck so much at them. *sighs* We can't all be as talanted as you. ;D

Great job and God bless.

oh very very deep and thought-provoking. you have a talent for haikus. thank you for your review, by the way.

Painful and intense. Nice use of metaphor. Great job.